How to give feedback (Eng 8B)

When you have finished writing your letters I want you to help each other. Before you start, we need to take a look at some useful phrases and how to work with Two stars and a wish.

1. Finish writing your letter.
2. Find someone that is finished and change letters- share your letters with each other. Use your eduhoor.se address. Remember to share your document with me if you haven't done it already: sara.bruun@eduhoor.se
3. Read the phrases below together and make sure you both understand the meaning.
4. Read the letter from your friend.
5. Write your feedback in the google doc. I show you if you don't know how to do it.
6. Has the author followed the instructions? Does he/she start with Dear ...;
Does he, she finish with Best regards ... ;
7. Is the text coherent?
8. Grammar? Has the author used is,are, has, have correctly? Anything else you can help with?
9. Spelling? Has the author written I with a capital I? Anything else you can help with?
10. Pick two phrases from STARS and one phrase from WISH - use those phrases to conclude your feedback. What 2 things were good about the letter and what does the author need to improve?


(The phrases below are made by Mia Smith and her pupils year 9 Herrgårdsskolan, Gothenburg)

STARS

Variation and vocabulary

 Your language is varied.
 You vary your language well.
 Your vocabulary is very varied.
 Your language felt very much alive.
 You have a varied language and don’t repeat yourself.

 Clarity and coherence 

 Your text has good flow.
 It’s easy to understand your text.
The content of your text was clear with good details.
The content was very clear.
 Your text has a clear line of argument.
 There was a clear line of argument in your text, making it easy to understand.
 Your text is coherent and clear.
 You reason with good arguments to support your point.

 Adaption 

 Your writing is well adapted to your theme.
 You adapt your language to different genres.
You adapt your text to the receiver and situation.
 Grammar and spelling Good sentence structure and descriptions.  
You write with good grammar.

 WISHES

Variation and vocabulary 

 You could vary your vocabulary more.
 You could use more difficult words and sentences.
 Try to read more difficult text to learn how to write like that.
 You need to expand your vocabulary.
 Try to make your language come alive more.

 Clarity and coherence

 Your text could have better flow.
 You could develop your reasoning more.
 Try to make your text more coherent.
 Next time you write a text, make sure it has a clear line of argument.
 You can work with clarifying your text.

 Adaption

You could adapt your language more to your theme.
 You can think about adapting your text to the receiver and situation.
You should try to adapt the language to your genre.
You could adapt your language more to the purpose.

 Grammar and spelling
 You can improve the grammar in your text.
 You need to improve the sentence structure.
 There are some spelling mistakes, read through your text once more to find them.
 Think about what tense you use (verbs).

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