Feedback - improve your texts

Your letters

I have read all your letters and now you need to improve your texts. 

First of all, read through the checklist below and see if there is something you can
improve. Feel free to help each other. 

Checklist 

1. Do all sentences, people and places begin with a capital letter?
2. Do all sentences end with correct punctuation? (. , ? !)  Help: Punctuation 
3. Has the author written I with a capital I?
4. Are there varied sentence lengths?
5. Has the author remembered paragraph division?  Help: Paragraphs
5. Are there colourful and describing words?
6. Has the author followed the instructions on how to write a letter?
7. Is the text interesting and worth reading - if not - what can be improved?
7. Are the verb forms correctly written? Help: Verb
8. Did you check the text for spelling mistakes? 
Don't use Google Translate.
Help:
Dictionaries:
 ord.se
Merriam-Webster.com

9. The last step is to go to Grammarly
- Sign in to Grammarly with your Google account.
- Click on NEW. Type the title of your text. 
- Go to the text you are working with and copy it. Then go back to Grammarly and paste it.
- Grammarly will now help you check your text for spelling and grammar mistakes.
OBS! When you have pasted the text into Grammarly - show me before you move on. 

-Click on the underlined words to find out what is wrong. Check the grammar and spelling mistakes and go back and forth to the text you are working with. 
- Take notes so you know what you need to learn and perhaps ask me about. 

10. Tell me that you are finished. Show me your notes and your text. 

11. Hand in your improved text in Google Classroom again. 

/ Sara 

How to give feedback - The Perks of being...

You have now finished both reading and writing about the book The Perks of being a wallflower. Today you are going to read a text that one of your friends has written and you are going to give feedback to help your friend improve his or her text.

1. In Google Classroom you will find out whose text you will read and work with. Then click on the attached link, which will lead you to a folder in Google drive. Find the name of your friend's text, open it and make your own copy.
2. Re-name the text like this:
Feedback from XXX to XXX
3. Read the text.
4. Give your friend comments in Google Docs. Select the word or phrase that you would like to comment. An icon with a plus sign will appear. Click on the icon to add your comment.

The checklist below will help you:

Checklist 

1. Do all sentences, people and places begin with a capital letter?
2. Do all sentences end with correct punctuation? (. , ? !)  Help: Punctuation
3. Has the author written I with a capital I?
4. Are there varied sentence lengths?
5. Has the author remembered paragraph division?  Help: Paragraphs
5. Are there colourful and describing words?
6. Has the author followed the instructions Sara gave on how to write the text?
7. Is the text interesting and worth reading - if not - what can be improved?
7. Are the verb forms correctly written? Help: Verb
8. Did you check the text for spelling mistakes? Don't use Google Translate.
Help:
Dictionaries:
 ord.se
Merriam-Webster.com

9. The last step is to go to Grammarly
- Sign in to Grammarly with your Google account.
- Click on NEW. Type the title of the text you are working with: Feedback to XX from XX
- Go to the text you are working with and copy it. Then go back to Grammarly and paste it.
- Grammarly will now help you check your text for spelling and grammar mistakes.
OBS! When you have pasted the text into Grammarly - show me before you move on. 

-Click on the underlined words to find out what is wrong. Check the grammar and spelling mistakes and go back and forth to the text you are working with. Continue giving your friend comments.
9. When you are finished:
Write a comment to your friend where you tell him or her two things that you really liked about the text and one thing that your friend needs to think about the next time he or she is writing a text.
Post this comment at the very top of the text, next to the friend's name so I easily can find it.
10. Tell your friend and me that you are finished.
11. When you get your text back:
 - Go through your text and fix it. Make sure you understand what is wrong and learn from your mistakes.
- Tell me when you are done.

Sara

How to give feedback on a text

On Friday, you will get an essay from someone in another class. You are going to give feedback. To be able to do that, please watch the film. Then take a look at the phrases below the film. Those phrases can help you giving the feedback.
1. Watch the film
2. Follow the different steps of the film and write your comments, to the right, in the margin.
3. Think about how the text can be improved. Use the phrases from Two stars and wish and write your comments at the end of the essay.
4. Hand in your feedback to your teacher.
5. When you get your own text back, you need to go through the comments and re-write your text at home.
6. If you re-write your text on the computer, remember to share the text with your teacher.

(LGR 11, Kunskapskrav för A år 9: För att förtydliga och variera sin kommunikation kan eleven bearbeta och göra välgrundade förbättringar av egna framställningar)





Two Stars and a Wish
STARS

Variation and vocabulary 

 Your language is varied.
 You vary your language well.
 Your vocabulary is very varied.
 Your language felt very much alive.
 You have a varied language and don’t repeat yourself.

 Clarity and coherence 

 Your text has good flow.
 It’s easy to understand your text.
The content of your text was clear with good details.
 The content was very clear.
 Your text has a clear line of argument.
 There was a clear line of argument in your text, making it easy to understand.
 Your text is coherent and clear.
 You reason with good arguments to support your point.

 Adaption

 Your writing is well adapted to your theme.
 You adapt your language to different genres.
You adapt your text to the receiver and situation.

 Grammar and spelling

 Good sentence structure and descriptions.
 You write with good grammar.

 WISHES

 Variation and vocabulary

 You could vary your vocabulary more.
 You could use more difficult words and sentences.
 Try to read more difficult text to learn how to write like that.
 You need to expand your vocabulary.
 Try to make your language come alive more.

 Clarity and coherence

 Your text could have better flow.
 You could develop your reasoning more.
 Try to make your text more coherent.  
Next time you write a text, make sure it has a clear line of argument.  
You can work with clarifying your text
.
 Adaption
 You could adapt your language more to your theme.
 You can think about adapting your text to the receiver and situation.
You should try to adapt the language to your genre.
You could adapt your language more to the purpose

 Grammar and spelling 

 You can improve the grammar in your text.
 You need to improve the sentence structure.
 There are some spelling mistakes, read through your text once more to find them.
 Think about what tense you use (verbs).

(The phrases are made by Mia Smith and her students)

 Sara